Nicely written, Ahs -- I would like you to add a photo - after the title [in edit] -- [get an image from where others here get theirs - I use gifs a lot] -- and also add tags to your story so algorithm can rank it to show others -- this is done at time of publishing so keep your eye out for the box -- you can make up to 5 tags -- examples of tags are things like "poetry", "love". "history", etc - depends what it is!

You write well, good luck! If you need to know something just ask anyone -- they're pretty cool here -